Dakota and Katie
Story Concept
1. Our story will begin with Teaghen, a 17 year old high school senior that has faced many challenges already in her life. She is the star forward player on her high school championship team and is a straight A student. Her junior year, she met a boy that she thought was going to be the one. He gave her flowers when she least expected it, he wrote her notes and he made her feel like she was important to someone. In her household, Teaghen is the oldest so she does not get a lot of attention so when she finally did from Mason, she completely infatuated herself. The story starts in a classroom with Teaghen surrounded by all her friends talking after class before the bell rings. They’re talking about their plans for the weekend and what crazy parties are going down.
2. Teaghen and Mason decided not to go to the party that’s going on this weekend, even though it’s for mason’s soccer team. He surprises her and takes her out to dinner for her birthday and they have a night full of adventures. He takes her to an open park and lays a blanket down in the middle of an open sky. They talked for hours about their lives in the future and how perfect they are for each other. It’s only been 3 months, but they are in love. They have sex. And that is how she becomes pregnant.
3. The rising action points will include mason and teaghen slowly start to get into bigger and bigger fights. She misses her first period but doesn’t think anything of it. Her friends start to slowly disappear because she is so infatuated with her boyfriend.
4. Teaghen ends up getting an abortion before anyone noticed and has been trying to forget it ever happened. Mason, being furious in her actions, leaves her and she now has no one on her side.
5. Her friends grew their distance while she was dating mason, so she is now left alone and is depressed. Teaghen wants to escape her life right now and not turn back. Her little brother just got diagnosed with cancer, her best friends have found a new group since Mason was in the picture and Teaghen ignored them, her parents are fighting constantly and she just publically had an allergic reaction to peanuts in the middle of the mall. She needs an escape.
6. She finds herself interested in the school musical because they are doing The Sound of Music which is her favorite musical of all time. When she goes to auditions, she discovers a person that she never knew existed inside. She meets a boy and some new friends and takes the best stride of her life so far. Teaghen brings her school back together and makes everyone join in union before they all go their separate ways. Old broken bonds are mended and new relationships emerge.
I think that this will be very interesting, for the better. As I was reading it, I wanted to know what happens with the baby. It seems like the focus is on her relationship building with old friends, which is good, but it just seems like she could just be a loner who becomes friends with a weird kid and people shun her. I think incorporating the pregnancy more will help, which you may be planning, I just don't know yet. Otherwise, this is a nice outline and an interesting story.
ReplyDeleteI was pretty worried about how you would go about making this original, but this seems to be going in the right direction. The character development and the events that happen look like they have been fully thought about. This looks good (: One thing I would make sure of is that you make her feel alone when shes alone, having a straight A "star" forward player doesn't really seem like she would feel unappreciated, especially if she had a big group of friends. When she meets Mason she should have a big change in someone that cares, so I would just be a little careful with that but otherwise looks good guys!
ReplyDeleteI think the story concept is slightly overdone in things like Secret Life and other tv dramas, but you seem to have a good way of making this concept of teen pregnancy and boy drama original. Im excited to read it
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